Cotton

Hey... here as promised :) Well, I like your style, general use of language etc etc. Boring comment I know but it's true. It's very accessible and stuff. :) honest... ...

Wow. Such a dark story! I really hope you're just naturally talented at creating a creepy character rather than anything else! Because Jack is so... precisely what you want him ...

I think the badges seem cool... there's one for 1001 posts, but what about reviews? Will there ... wait, the gold stars are reviews aren't they? Never mind then AHAHa ...

Hey! This is just the right length for a first section, so it's nice and easy for me to read and comment on in my poor, about-to-go-back-to-school lethargy. Thank you ...

Well personally I like 6, 8, 9 and 10 the best. The door in number 6 made me go "ooooh... what an interesting door." A story-starter, I reckon. Number 8 ...

Banned for having far too many points... and thereby making the rest of us look bad. ;)

Hi! I'm not going to very helpful, so I apologise in advance for that. This is really too long for one post... so I would suggest removing at least chapter ...

Well, I joined back in April - and it feels so much longer than like 8 months!! I've got loads of new writing insights since I joined and learned loads ...

Hi there! First of all, welcome to YWS! I know that it was quite daunting when I first started, so if you have any questions please do PM me, or ...

Hey! It's really different, and since I recently went to a Live-Literature evening and saw some people perform - yes, perform - their poetry, I really think this is the ...

Hiya, me again. Sorry, but there was something I forgot to mention, because I'd read it before but then I came back to your story later on and was so ...

Hiya! First off, your writing style is gorgeous. I love it. It's clean cut, descriptive in all the right places but never too much, and you have an interesting, subtle ...

Wow. This was really heavy. It has a powerful message, and you deliver it really really well. And I mean that. Your description was heart-wrenching at times. Sometimes there was ...

Hi! I'm basically going to repeat what has been said above: this is a really cool idea, and it could become like a regular. It's up to you where you ...

Hey! Like above, I'm just going to review your prologue for now, and if you would like my advice on the first chapter let me know. First of all, it's ...