Cotton

hi there :D For starters, I loved the originality of this piece. Seriously, the angle was completely fantastic. Through the sounds and the voices, you painted a portrait that was ...

wow. You write with some really impressive maturity, and your choice of language and your use of it is something I really don't think you should change - scratch that, ...

HA lol. Nice sense of comedy and ludicrousness in this piece - I love it! :D Really nicely paced, great style so yeah. Can't think of more to say, except ...

hi there :D I'm getting some really creepy vibes! You paint a fantastic picture with your words, and this is short and sweet and lovely. Fantastic work! What I'm going ...

hi there :) I love the shortness of this, but I think you could put more in this - I just feel there's not quite enough to draw me in ...

this is tremendous. Really, honestly, truly. I loved how you broke it up into those sections, and your style is almost as perfect as you could wish for (more of ...

hello :) I'm definitely of the female species, so no worries :D I'll point out a few things you should look at in the first section: I always knew there ...

hi there :) so OK, I really like the premise of this and the characters so far, but you've got me confused. Are you writing in the third person with ...

God this was beautiful. I don't want to get too mushy, but this was just lovely. My father's not one of these kind specimens, and I can never call him ...

hello :) I loved the emotions in this piece - well, mainly in the first paragraph. That was manageable, and it was wonderfully written. Your second - hmm. Not quite ...

hey :) what an awfully lovely thing to post! You communicated pretty much everything really well, like Matt's pain and loss, and how he shut everything away. And you kept ...

oh I just read your replies... I forgot to check the box "notify me when a reply is posted" which was silly xD I'm really glad what I said made ...

hi :D I see you only just joined, so have a massive welcome on the house :D :D you'll fit right in. someone should let you know - and wahey! ...

hi there! you joined THIS MORNING? welcome! :D :D I know you'll love it here on YWS - I know I do xD since you are brand-spanking new and shiny, ...

hi :) what a powerful piece! You expressed your character's confusion really well, and I was generally very impressed with your style - you have some good panache (and if ...