Cotton

here as requested :D you create a really nice rhythm here, and I like the evenness of your lines. That's more or less as deep as I'll go with you, ...

Hi there :) I agree with the above review - your use of details and sense of emotions are really, really good. Particularly vivid, which is nice. You also drop ...

yeah, I tend to "agree" with the peoples who are saying that they eavesdrop on their characters... at the moment, I'm writing some characters that live in the real world, ...

HAHAHAHAHAHA I actually lol'd. properly... to myself :P one critique: can you make this longer?!? PLEASE?!? teehehehe how about the rest of the books? ~*cottonrulz*~

hi there :) I see you're new to YWS, so have a great big welcome from me :D everyone's really friendly and they give some fantastic advice. Something you probably ...

hi there :) I liked how you spun the looming sadness and stuff into the whole piece, but I think at times you did this a little too much instead ...

my my my. The quality of work to be found on this site continually amazes me! (Also, where it says your age is "14", that's a joke, right? It's not ...

yeah, kinda... it's only an ickle baby right now, and I haven't posted it on here or anything but I'm really starting to get pulled in :D if anyone's interested, ...

hi there :) welcome to YWS! I see you're quite new, so I hope you are settling in all right (of course you are, it's lovely here!) I'm not sure ...

hi there :) So yeah I had a skim through the previous reviews and I think they have a point - although, I see your wish to keep an aura ...

hey... yeah this is weird, but I'm gathering that the contest is to shrink a piece of writing so it is barely intelligible? Or so that people who are addicted ...

hey :D This will probably sound harsher than I mean it to, but I thought that your character's voice was kind of confused in places, and this made reading it ...

hi :D OK, so some intense action here - you weren't lying. Obviously it's going to feel a little confused to me because this is essentially a "random" snippet of ...

hello! :D what a sweet little story! I mean little in the literal sense, and definitely not in the condescending sense, because absolutely no condescension is required. This was smart, ...

I almost don't want to say anything - just leave it as it is. "wow" seems so... lame. But I'll use it anyway. At first glance, I thought this was ...