ConfusingSillyLittleGirl

This is really good to me! It sounds like a prayer, which makes that which you say fit with it even more! But the second stanza's rythm seemed very different ...

That's a sad poem. The simplicity of the poem gives it it's own kind of feel, maybe you should try and add more reasons or emotions because it starts and ...

Haha yeah what did you do, joke, thanks, I never really was good in rythm, but I'm going to try and improve it.

Yes thank you!

I feel like a real ideot, but I still don't understand the whole points thing? What do you use it for?

[b]WAITING FOR YOU The smell of rain reaches my heart And the ongoing thoughts of you Slip from the shadows. Your smile no longer beams And your touch has turned ...

Very good, yes it does sound like a song! I really liked it, I also liked the metaphores you used, it makes it all more interesting and pulls you in ...

Thanks alot :) Yeah I will got read them, I don't want to get into trouble :)

I liked it, but I do think that the rythm and rhyme didn't work so well in the mid section, but i do like the style in which you write ...

Wow, it will make such a good story! I can just imagene it, the way you write makes the images clear, although I was confused at a few places. . ...

I like the idea, and it feels like I can realte to the poem, although I do think that with this type of theme and what you are trying to ...

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