ConfusingSillyLittleGirl

Roxan’s dark hair cascaded down her shoulders and light strands were lifted in the cool evening air. Her penetrating blue eyes searched through the dishevelled town. How could the people ...

Hmmm I really like this poem, I felt like I coul relate, I also liked the rythm but unfortunately you lost it in the last paragraph. I like the words ...

Wow, I really loved the ending. I felt swept up by it all, very nice. The end almost made me think about that song of Slipknot, Dead Memories in my ...

I like it, I like the rhyme and I like the the fact that is isn't that spesific, that way the reader can make up his or her own answers ...

Our teacher gave us topics to write essays and I didn't like any of the topics so I chose this one and twisted it completely. “Now what I want is ...

So beautiful yet so sad, I liked the flow and the rythm, I also think you should carry on with poetry, its obvious that you have a very big talent ...

Dam, this is amazingly beautiful, I loved the way you composed it, the rythm and the ryhm, also the words, very well done! Gold star! I don't really know what ...

It's sloppy and free verse, but it's not supposed to be a perfect, pretty little poem. Back bent slightly By the weight of the world Hands always fisted Against life’s ...

Dam, it is amazing that anyone can write something in Old English like you can, not many people of today can write like this. I must say it was really ...

Hey! I am the first to crit this, yay. First let me say that I really like your grammar or the way that you construct your sentences, I also like ...

LAUGH OUT LOUD! That was brilliant!!! I think my favorite character is the elf haha hilarious! I really like the way you write and the whole comedy theme, I kind ...

Dreamwalker, I just have to say that I really loved this piece of work- it was so original and different, not just that, the simplicity makes it altogether beautiful. The ...

Heya thanks for your crits guys! Oh yeah and 200397 I understand what you are saying and I also did realise the stanzas were getting bigger when I wrote them ...

This is for someone who lives far away from me whom I miss alot. Across mountains Of godly-green I dream back And remember. And over roads Of unending velvet I ...

It's very deep, I like it. A few things though: 1) I like "a plastered scream" very visual. 2) "ON her cold pale head" It would work better if you ...