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Okay, THIS is the last one of these until I get more feedback. :P Three The place Amelia had thought was the Kay County Fair turned out to be just ...

First and foremost, because you're new, I just need to point out that along with posting your own stories, you need to review others as well to earn points. I ...

Thank you for the feedback! It's all very helpful, and I'm taking all of the advice. I actually took the name Amelia from Amelia Atwater Rhodes and Dahl from Roald ...

I love your description of the pursuit of the elk. It's so exciting! And written well too. I'm definitely loving this story! Many hearts I throw at it!!! She hates ...

Hey, we're not all very young here. I turn 19 in less than a month, and I attend college and edit a literary journal. Anyway, welcome and hope you stay! ...

I am very drawn into this story. About the show, not tell thing - it is something to avoid, but also something a lot of popular authors do. :wink: Try ...

I just wanted to add that I agree with Tatra - this story reminds me of the Dark is Rising. Why is that? I read it so long ago and ...

Wow! What did she do to deserve this? I am totally hooked. I like werewolf stories, but I feel that so few good ones have been written. This has me ...

Eros and Psyche is my FAVORITE Greek myth, and I absolutely adore what you've written here! I never imagined somebody writing it out in detail. Your dialogue is believable and ...

A good, interesting story. The writing's very smart sounding. I feel dazzled by the sci-fi speak! Almost every nitpicking thing has already been pointed out. Here... New York Times read ...

OF COURSE a story about teens living on the streets gets my attention! The concept could go anywhere. Just a few problems to add... Carter Adams, an unwanted teen of ...

The first part of this chapter was already posted in the prior thread. I don't know how to link to the first chapter. I guess I'll figure it all out. ...

Aw, thank you! I definitely never thought somebody would say THAT. I did once have more there where her boyfriend left her. One time when I was rereading it a ...

I don't think you should give up on the story! If you work through it, it has potential. And I disagree with the ten year old not knowing about an ...

Personally I never saw what was so horrible about cliches. YES - one should try to be original. And you can't always rely on cliches. But sometimes when I'm read ...