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Eek, I'm sorry this went unnoticed. You don't deserve that, we'll fix that right up. Not much could be seen through the thick fog as the street lights were dull ...

and didn't need to worry much of anything I think you mean to have "about" after worry. who came to the baby and marked on her wrist as his daughter. ...

I really like the introduction. The opening sentence really snags the attention. of colleting bubbles on our tongue Just a small spelling typo up there. *points* Something so spectacular, I ...

If this is based off "World of Warcraft" then this should be in the fan-fiction forum. I'm not sure how to flag a moderator. :oops:

This doesn't really have a title yet, so I just put that for now. Also, this is just a sort of introduction and more is explained later on, so I ...

Welcometo YWS! *hugs and cookies* Sam makes good points about two reviews and plot, so I'll be the grammar-and-style queen. Ted Weller, he's not the 'star of the football team', ...

The lightning lit the sky with a deafening crack in perfect unison with the [s]booming[/s] thunder and the constant downpour. First, people always make thunder boom. Try to think of ...

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Banned for having 11 posts and no reviews.

I just saw this movie today. I thought it was just plain AWFUL! The concept was painful to me, and the one scene with the gun chain reaction... those who ...

Username: 95% for sheer win CT: 50% What if I don't want to? Avatar: 50% vettes are okay..... S: 70% I forgot it... emm, points deducted! haha Overall: 66.25

An amazing and pervasive topic we can't escape. Of course I'll participate... I'm what I call a grumpy agnostic, and as one I feel I can't help much, since I ...

Sam. o_o This. is . BEAUTIFUL. Grammar, grammar, grammar... I can't even dare nitpick at your work... the only thing I found: except for when fevers wrack their bodies and ...

This is written well, grammar and stylistically. The problem I see, and the person above me saw, is in characterization. Immediately in the beginning dialogue you throw a lot of ...

In his mind, he called her Esmeralda, the Gypsy queen. Each time he saw her, in the window across the way, he felt a fresh stir of passion, a resurgence ...