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Clickduncake

  • Writing Activities Re: Rate the first sentence above you

    2/10 A bit crowded. It seems that you were jumping up and down screaming "pick me! Pick me!" to the reader who is considering buying you. --- The Vampires stole ...

    May 13, 2015
  • Writing Activities Re: Rate the first sentence above you

    7/10 A very interesting twist on the save the world sub genre. Though, it does seem to lack much character motivation/a way of getting across a sympathetic protagonist. All she ...

    Mar 23, 2015
  • Writing Activities Re: Rate the first sentence above you

    3/10 This isn't a bad opening line, just a pet peeve of mine. You see, you're being obscure about this "she" when there is no need to be. What was ...

    Mar 18, 2015
  • Writing Activities Re: Rate the first sentence above you

    5/10 Perhaps I need some context for this one, but I didn't really like it. There wasn't anything wrong with it, other than the fact that it seems like a ...

    Feb 14, 2015
  • Randomosity Archive Re: The User Below You ... [3]

    Not at all. I like it short :P TUBM has stepped on Lego's this past month.

    Feb 12, 2015
  • Randomosity Archive Re: The User Below You ... [3]

    Anything by Brandon Sanderson I am a fanboy over. TUBM has already spent their Christmas money.

    Feb 11, 2015
  • Randomosity Archive Re: The User Below You ... [3]

    Um, hehe. Hehe. Stop looking at me like that. TUBM is a middle child.

    Feb 9, 2015
  • Fiction Discussion Re: Top 5 Worst Books You Ever Read

    Hm, five? I don't know if I can do it. 5. All the Dune books after the first. Don't get me wrong, I love me some Dune. But after the ...

    Feb 3, 2015
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hi i'm the philoneist

    Welcome to YWS! If you have any question or need a review feel free to ask me!

    Jan 31, 2015
  • Writing Activities Re: Rate the first sentence above you

    8/10 Very well put together, nicely flowing. It just seems right . The problem I have is the draw for me to read the book isn't as strong as the ...

    Jan 31, 2015
  • WRFF Archive Re: PICK ME PICK ME - Timmy's Reviewing Endeavors

    I'd love a review for I hope you like it :3

    Jan 31, 2015
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hello I am new.

    Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm Clickdun and I'll be... well, someone who said hi. :)

    Jan 31, 2015
  • Writing Activities Re: Rate the first sentence above you

    7/10 Though it has room for improvement, it is a strong start. Just a little nipick: why do we need to know it was half past eight? Why not just ...

    Jan 30, 2015
  • Welcome Mat Re: Writer in Miami

    Welcome back Lance! :) *Welcoming confetti* What's your book about?

    Jan 27, 2015
  • Welcome Mat Re: Hi, new here!

    @ClippedWings Go to the bottom of the piece you wish to review, there should be a little box that asks you "is this a review?" under the area where you ...

    Jan 27, 2015


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