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Here's the revised version. Again, crits are appreciated. “Aubade” By K.J. Hascall 8/19/06 Revised 8/26/06 I slip out to the back stair at a late night, late summer party, alcohol ...

T.S. Elliot's "The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock." Wallace Stevens' "Sunday Morning." Tennyson's "Locksley Hall." Robert Burns' "Flow Gently, Sweet Afton" (the band Nickel Creek made this into a ...

Bob - This is a beautiful poem, it just needs some clarifying and tightening. Here are my suggestions: Life is the place you swing, not looking down, the earth god's ...

WARNING: If you're offended by curse words, don't read this. “Left” By K.J. Hascall 9/24/06 There’s a dusty cloud following my car, bouncing up and down on the washboard road. ...

DD - I go to the University of Nebraska-Lincoln, and I don't know if that minors rule applies here, because there were a couple of 16-year-olds in my dorm freshman ...

Precocious, aren't you? Read "Ender's Game" by Orson Scott Card. I read it when I was about your age... it opened up a whole new world for me. It's about ...

OK, I've noticed a few things. First of all... your line breaks are a little funky. When you make a line break, you need to consider how much the breaks ...

Antigone - thanks for the crit! It was very helpful. I've taken your advice on the bit about ice cubes, breaking up the sock drawer line, and the "very acutely." ...

Ani - thanks for reading. Vermillion is spelled right, because that is the American spelling. You are probably more familiar with the British spelling, which only employs one 'L'. "The ...

I like this poem because I despise Shakespeare. Just a thought.

A question: Why is it “Observation from the Back Stair”. tenants-tenant’s. "We lean against the walls and railings, content to enjoy the polite talk, for sometimes we are the only ...

XG - I LOVE, ADORE, and ADMIRE this poem immensely. It's one of the best I've read on this site. I even had my roommate read it and we both ...

Yes, this poem is long, but all critiques are greatly appreciated!!! This really lays open my inner-most feelings, so be thorough and gentle. “Observation from the Back Stair” By K.J. ...

This is a lovely poem, Inertia, and I very much enjoyed the message of it. One critique - the transition between the first and second stanzas is very rough and ...

Well, the title is changed, but there's really nowhere to break for stanzas. It doesn't need them, nor want for them.