ChurlishLassy

it starts out sounding like a poem, but then begins to sound more like a not-poem, not sure what I mean but, I am very picky in good poetry. Sorry.

Number one is more realistic and number two funner, so i would go with number one for the purpose of the critique, but would rather hang number 2 above my ...

I was surprisingly great considering you are 13. I think it would be great for any age, I loved that the rhymes didn't seem forced at all. I also like ...

I liked it more than the title suggested I would. It reminds me of those documentaries talking about the killer prehistoric 8 foot tall birds, am I close? Some of ...

I really liked the way you named the historical figures, it made it seem more real. Instead of just someone did something. Interesting to see human evolution.

This is the first story I have writen with an ending, I would REALLY appreciate any input. I have never tried horror before either. She was screaming. It was a ...

Great book. Probably my favorite. By John Kennedy O'Toole. One of the few books my brilliant father has ever recommended to me. Very real. It is the absolute tragic comedy. ...

Anyone who liked it read, The Dogs of Babel. Cult involved.

I like the way you used a commonplace object in a poetic way. I think this would sound really good as a song.

All excellent suggestions! Great feedback, makes me want to continue to try poetry. I corrected it :D I REALLY appreciate it. I think it is really cool you at first ...

hello darling you look a bit gaunt a little anorexic hungry eat me won't you? just a nibble I'm delicious high in the chemicals that make chocolate taste of hugs ...

I noticed at our public library bibles next to books on cancer and Torahs. That doesn't seem right, shouldn't it be in the fiction section? or should there be a ...

Good idea, but it could be much more powerful.

Last person to post wins within three days. So far I am winning. WHich means everyone else is losing. HA ha ha. Ha. :shock:

Eh, 6/10, sounds deep but I don't think it is really.