Chloseph

Wow, I will not review this (sorry) but I loved it all! Thats all I'm here to say.

I absolutly loved this! A few tweaks and it will genuinly be as good as anything you find published! *claps lots*. Right, I'll go through it line by line as ...

*toddles off to edit... alot*

Transcendental moments eclipse Becoming themselves Yet still missing fragments As elusive as stars Hovering amongst The space that shrouds us Sparkling dust Untouchable And real. So real between us Th

Overall I really enjoyed this; each line is explained clearly so the general meaning and feeling is understood, yet you do this without rambling at any points. I got such ...

I really liked this - short and sweet. I liked the simplicity, as with a subject like this it is often so easy to over-do flowery language and bulk it ...