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You can make a film,you know that? You clearly had observed,reserched historical battles. I'm not the one to write about battles and all but your tip was certainly helpful. I ...

I really been thinking how to write a cliff hanger and "volla".Here is a tip showing me showing me exactly how to do it. Thank you so much. :D

Yup,"Said really is a boring term as we come across it many times" Most authors use many more words other than "Said" "Well said" barked Ernie Macmillan "Personally,I think this ...

You know what this story reminds me of? Pirates of the Carribean 3rd movie also begins with those people going to the gallows. So,these should be fixed, She shivered in ...

Turning from bad to worse as I see it. Please,make something happen to Ivy. “Prison.” Ellima shook her head and tried to pull away from him. Put it like "Ellima ...

Aw,poor Ellima.I thought she got the better of Ivy but this certainly not what I expected. What has Ivy ever done to you?” Ellima turned away from her. Why didn't ...

A really great story,much more better than the first part. And you made that really annoying Ivy get embarrased infront of all those people,that was just what she needed.A really ...

I don't know what to say,the others had pointed out all the mistakes. But I theresay I will find some, Excruciating pain filled her body as Ellima heard these words. ...

So you say that everybody is going to die in Harry's lator life?Interesting. :D But the story does have mistakes,nevertheless, His emerald eyes sparkled with rage and a touch of ...

It was mid-night.A boat was appraoching the shore of a was not making any sound on the smooth surface of the water.Thick canopy forests grew on either sides of the ...

Are there any other words that can be equelled to the word WOW? If there are all thoes should go to your book. But there is some er...... thing that ...

I can say that you had written the story in a great hurry because you had made a lot of mistakes. Comments in bold text, My muscles tensed , I ...

Your story is way too short but a good cliff-hanger as Livinginfantasy says. But you should make these up, Toby, was an alright guy, I guess, but he was a ...

This is my first story so please read it and critic _______________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________ "DANIEL ROWERT"

Yup,confusing is the word allright, Who is Colastor?The cubs father?Nicarga's father?Brother?Whoever he is you should describe him later. Who is Geedo?If he is a the one who is delivering the ...