Chirantha

Firstly, what makes up a good story? A plot. and then it needs important points leading up to that plot. You should not dwell too long on minor points, and ...

Well, you are banned for having a username which is invalid. and for being elsewhere. and for having exactly 80 posts.

Hello to both Liloo and Nara. Welcome to YWS. I'm Chirantha and that's my real name. So, I should say that both of you should look at the list of ...

Wow, now certainly, this is a gripping story. No matter what the others say, I think your characters were great. They were unexpectable. Good names by the way, although the ...

I hate purplish pink (it used to be the colour of a really nauseating medicine, called Erithromiseen, heard of it?)

er..... Sonia? Guess my name, It begins with C, has 9 letters.

You Bella, are banned for being an year older than me, for being a girl, for having ten times more posts than me and finnaly banned for being in a ...

er...... no. that's because I don't know what they are. Okay, the person below me is not wearing any clothes on. (and I mean any clothes)

Well, principal Skinner would. If I died, well, for one thing no one will remember me. Well, I hope if I died (don't even think about it) I will live ...

"Careful mate" Nate said to Sakah pulling her up "you don't want to go to a hospital now" I carefully sipped my second cherry sirup, keeping it away from both ...

Chirantha walks in and sits right next to Jenni, who was apologizing over and over again to the person she had spilled coke onto, and orders a cherry sirup mixed ...

Okay, your story was written well, greatly in fact. But as the others had pointed out you shouldn't write "she everytime. Try to change it. I'll give you an example. ...

The problem with many other stories is that they don't have a very good beggining. Yours was exeptionaly well described and the picture of the story formed in my mind. ...

Much to my disappointment, I haven't read the twilight series yet. Your story was well written and greatly described. And also you had used idioms which brought a great affect ...

Ahhhh, tenses. I hate those. :evil: I mean how can I start this with correct tenses. Can anyone show that to me? By examples of my own story. Please.