Chirantha

Hi, writerlover. Welcome to YWS. :D I'm Chirantha and I think it's reasonable for you to be scared of revealing you personal things. And I should tell you that you ...

Oooh, different kind of story isn't it? Great work. But your character wasn't made in a great way. I mean she wasn't described well. Okay, nit-picks, "Run away! Emily, you ...

Well, what should I say? The others had already pointed out the mistakes. But first I like to say, that what's this story about? It doesn't seem to have an ...

Amelia getting better and happier, eh? Okay, to mistakes, When I’d walked into a science lesson, Er.....how can you walk into a science lesson? Better change that to "When I'd ...

I sorry to review the seventh and not reviewing the fifth and sixth ones. I really sorry, sky. :cry: But I will right after I review this. Okay, this is ...

But "said" can get all too irritating when it is repeated over and over and over again. It should be like, try not to use "said" too many times and ...

Oooh, ghost stories. yay! I like them alot. Now, I can see the fear and scariness in this story, but I can also see that your ideas suddenly jumps from ...

There are many things I should say. Firstly, you can't have "hi" as a topic. And the story's name shouldn't be in the topic description. Secondly, you had written a ...

Is it okay if I join? If so, here's my vampire. :twisted: Name - Xing cai Age - 14 Clan - chinnese Appearence - Other - A sweet and calm ...

Okay, firstly, Hi, welcome to YWS. I get straight to the review. And I'm reviewing your revised edition. Pain. Fear. Loneliness. Separation. Sadness. Put 'commas' after each of these words. ...

Banned for living in fantasy

There are so many gramatical, spelling and other mistakes. I'll try to correct them all. I think I can Say your character is a girl. The fires roared. The only ...

"Huh? The kitchen? Is that where we're are gonna explore?" asked Layla ** I have an idea. I don't know if you'll agree, but can't we have Leon only having ...

Layla fell down the tree, on which she had been hiding in. She had been spying her friends from the moment they entered the forest. But she hadn't expected a ...

*Thanks. Okay, is my character (in the story) with your characters or somewhere else?*