ChimpanzeeMinkey

Once again I looooved it!!!! I don't think there are words to describe how much I'm craving more of this story! So first just a few nitpicks: watching the room ...

Winter had an icy grip on the city as large, white flakes drifted down from the gray heavens. The trees were naked skeletons, only slightly resembling their summer selves. The ...

Very compelling! The only huuuge problem with this is that there isn't any more of it to read! So I thought you did well, very well! I think everyone picked ...

I just have to say I LOVED this! I don't even know if I understand exactly what it's saying I just love the flow and all the brilliant word combinations ...

So I'm going to try and review this. Firstly I really liked this! It has a good flow and a lovely melancholy tone to it. Here goes: To the little ...

This was not unlike a lovely painting, i know it's not about a painting but I can't help but see it (at least a little bit) that way. I actually ...

Okaaay firstly this was cute and very humorous. Good job doing the best with a pretty odd subject. I wanted to wipe that bead of sweat off my forehead, but ...

I loved this as well! The wording is genius and has a lovely sprinkle of mystery to it. Nothing seemed out of place to me. Oh yes and the rhythm ...

So I just have to say I really, reeallly liked this! It almost felt like jumbled, fragments but it was lovely and it makes sense if you stop and think ...

So this was a somewhat spur of the moment piece. I'm too tired to think of a more fitting title, or for that matter, to think at all so if ...

So here it is rewritten and hopefully improved upon: Behind a lace of moonlit silence, between wakeful eyes and hidden dreams. You come to me on lulling waves, of tantalizing ...

This is so cute! I love the idea of the brain communicating with the heart in the form of a letter, very creative. I also really liked how the first ...

Good job on your first poem! It has a great flow and imagery. I like that you used poppies instead of something more cliche. This is a somewhat old/used subject ...

Short. Simple. Bloody. Absolutely brilliant!!! I really loved this it's one of the best things I've read since joining. Keep up the good work :)

Thank you everyone for your lovely comments and advice. I'll try to keep everything you've pointed out in mind in future writings :)