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Wow mags this is AWESOME!!! I love the general colour theme of yellow(?). Sometimes sunsets are kind of overwhelming when they have like 16 dif colours in them!! the other ...

Hey Mags! This is really good - I love it! Don' listen to Layla - shes a poopface. I loved the images you wrote about in this - it was ...

Once upon a time there was a smiley face that lived in a small apartment on the edge of town. He lived by himself and he was the most lonesome ...

Hey There! First off, this makes beautiful images in my mind :) it practically smells like summer. The feeling of the poem is aweseome, the rhythm needs a little work, ...

Name: Cindy McCarbreath Age: Unknown. Gender: Female Talent: Sneakiness Occupation: Homeless Appearance: Short, sneaky, dark, unmemorable which makes her aweseom History: Unknown Personality: Quick, S

CHAPTER 1: ESCAPE They had tried to give me away. Again. Handed over to another family. Whether they had kids, dogs, senile grandparents, expensive furniture, short attentions spans, or were ...

CHAPTER 1: ESCAPE They had tried to give me away. Again. Handed over to another family. Whether they had kids, dogs, senile grandparents, expensive furniture, short attentions spans, or were ...

Hello! First off, I really like this poem I think your really going somewhere with it. You have good grammar and punctuation, but I did notice a few errors: I ...

I'd like to swim with you In the waters of the blue Like the swallows in the sky And the flying apple pies When the eart turns brown I would ...

First of all I love this prologue!!! Even though it is very strong I still have soem pointers. First, give some forshadowing about the plot. There's a little forshadowing when ...

Hey guys! Thanks for all of your suggestions & ideas! I'm taking them all into consideration and I am going to do a lot of editing and re-writing. Thanks again ...

CHAPTER 1: ESCAPE They had tried to give me away. Again. To another family. Whether or not they had kids, dogs, senile grandparents, expensive furniture, short attentions spans, or were ...

Hey Mags I agree with the first few replyers, this is an awesome poem! However, remember to capatilize each new line. If I remember correctly they should always be capitlized ...

First of all, I love this poem. It has a very beautiful rhythm that could be turned into a song. Your first two paragraphs are probably the best: Two worlds ...

I think this is really good! It has a very smooth rythm that flows very nicely, and I think that the poem its self has a great subject that promts ...