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Re: love sucks
Hey there! Chibi here. So, as Ignatius said, this poem really needs a grammar check. Spelling, capitalization, punctuation are just as important in poetry as it is in prose. Below's ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Real or not?
Thanks for all the reviews, guys! I've just got a question for you...does it get too confusing when Brayden's talking about being half-real and whatnot? :P
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: What you don't see
OMG, this was awesome! XD, I loved the twist at the end. I seriously thought that it would be the good side of the person whose point of view you ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: I need a title...
Okay, so here is something I started writing a little while ago. It's one of my first attempts at horror, which I was never all that good at. So please ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: a leaf's life and yours
Okay, so I liked this. Your topic was really awesome. I never really thought about comparing my life to a leaf's. A very non-cliche approach to life. HOWEVER, if this ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Pain is Beauty
Oh God, wow. This was epic. It sent chills down my spine. And it rhymes! Normally I find rhyming poetry either clunky and awkward or annoyingly singsongy, but this was ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Real or not?
Sarah-15, a young writer who’s working on a novel. She wears a black T-shirt that says THE POWER OF THE PEN across the front and a small jean skirt. Brayden-15, ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: I love you as you are, now change
LOL, this made me laugh. :D Normally I don't like rhyming poetry but this was really awesome. XD I think your lines are a little bit long in this and ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: Dear Santa
OMG, this was amazing. If I could sit here and like this over and over again, I would. Awesome job. :D
Jun 3, 2011 -
Re: I don't even
Okay, so this is part of a novel I'm writing. I didn't edit out any parts that wouldn't make sense if you haven't read the whole thing, so...bear with me. ...
Jun 2, 2011 -
Re: Sisterly Affection
I'm not a real big fan of formal poetry, but this made me smile. :) I don't know much about the rules of sonnets or about iambic pentameter and whatnot, ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Compelled to Forgive
Hi there! So since you commented on my poem, I figured I'd take a look-see! :) So I'll just go straight out and say I'm not a big fan of ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: I Wish I Were a Stone
I wish I were a stone. Cold, unfeeling, dead, Not caring about anything. I wish I were a stone. That way I wouldn’t Have to face this feeling. I wish ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: Sumimasenga
Hey there! Chibi here. And welcome to YWS! So I love this poem. I think you brought your message across great while still being able to rhyme, something I am ...
May 27, 2011 -
Re: Come On, Sis!
Based this off of something in a novel I'm writing, I thought about it and inspiration struck. :P Just please don't kill it. :smt003 Come on Sis, what’s the use ...
May 26, 2011
