Chibi

oooooh....I likes it. I likes it alot! ...but then, I'm a bit biased, I love vampy stories. More! ...oh, and I'm too tired for a proper crit so I'll just ...

I actually thought the spider was eaten by a bird...and then I started wondering where the blazes the bird came from. Verses structure could use a bit of work, three ...

Honey, try reading some actual poetry before you post something. It's not even free verse...you just kept on writing something for as long as you wanted to, without any thought ...

Okay...Now I feel a little bit dense. Either that or I'm more tired than I think I am. Because I honestly cannot get into that poem. I'm like, reading it ...

Not bad, albeit I see three verses in that. Just three different sections of your poem that's all. Never say goodbye to me, I promise to see you soon, Why ...

Those two words have forever altered their meaning for me. Christmas is a time for family, peace, hope, love; Isn't it? A time of joy and a time of merry ...

A rather...depressive poem I think. Seriously, try to work on your self-image, I'm sure it's not -that- bad sheesh! Now, one line just...juttered out of place in the middle of ...

Grar! *sulk* I want to read that poem now. I read the critiques and it were sounds intruiging. But it's not there! *sulks more, poutingly* No fair! ~Chibi

Interesting poem...I feel it is more suited to Hallowe'en than Christmas XD But you get that. Bubbles suggested punctuation yes? Well...I agree with her, to a certain extent. Some places ...

Very nice, it's got a tone of...well, disbelief, despair and oh what's the word I'm looking for? Self-pity, that's it. You may ask where I got these ...emotions from? Well ...

Ah thanks...hehe, but I don't actually -use- all of the orders, nor describe them in that much detail in the rest of my tale...I suppose I could cut it out...but ...

Prologue On opening this book you will most probably be wondering ‘what’s this doing in my bag?’. In truth, you will have rented it or bought it, it doesn’t matter ...

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I like do alot of others. I can even hear the tune your lyrics are for. It's sweet. Well done. ~Chibi

Well....I'm odd. I only like music to listen to, I don't play anything but I want to play the harp and/or flute. Preferably the harp.....but yah. I also like to ...