Chibi

The cold kiss of a blade, The sharpened edge descending His life, my love, is ending It’s too late for love my dear. Sorrows stream down my face, Endlessly descending, ...

I liked the first stanza...and the second....but after that you sort of lost the point. Well, you more lost the poetry and threw in a rhyme just for the hell ...

I liked it, hehe, it reminds me of a childrens movie...but I'm not too sure if that's where you go the inspiration from so.... Yeah....punctuation would help a fair bit. ...

I like it, it's very....relevant for me. Well done, it touched me, like few poems have, and I adore poetry :) My compliments to you. ~Chibi

Awwww.....*wipes away a tear* That's so sweet...and sad... *sniffles* I can't crit it, my eyes are all blurry. :cry:

I agree with Darg, you've given us basically the start, middle and plot of the tale...we know what's happened, what's happening and what's going to happen. Yawn. Describe the dragon ...

Um....wow. What else can I say considering that I have no idea what you or anyone else means by the repeated mentions of a Duel...don't mind me. I like it! ...

8.27pm, 19th of May Father, mother and Harold are out hunting the local wildlife; I hope that they do not mistake a human for a deer… The first day of ...

wasn't that riveting, to say the least. Mind you, trying to keep a friend from suiciding doesn't help in giving ones full attention to the story at hand... But, it ...

oooh, I feel loved! ^_^ I so rarely get replies...maybe because I don't post much...>_> First off, my apologies, I start all of my tales with info dumpage, giving the ...

Interesting....But check through the paragraphs again hon, you missed a formatting and you've got three words to one line before you start another. Otherwise, intruiging, albeit it took a little ...

What she said. I read about...a quarter of it and my eyes were going fuzzy and my brain was saying NO WAY. Space it, give us clean paragraphs to read ...

3.21pm, 18th of May Hi, my name is…well, you can call me Miranda and I am, as the French would say ‘le loup garou’. Meaning, I’m a werewolf. Now, now, ...

but I am still playing around with the idea of what other clues I should insert to give the reader more of a feeling that she is infact a woman. ...

Not bad, I like it. You posted the first chapter a while ago aye? I remember it from somewhere so I just skimmed it and read the second one. I ...