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I am my own Granpa Many, many years ago When I was twenty-three I got married to a widow Pretty as could be. This widow had a grow-up daughter With ...

I like it...I think. I'm not exactly sure, but I don't -dis- like it exactly... Punctuation, one teeny tiny little thing that -really- annoys me is when people can't tell ...

Interesting... First off, punctuation. Comma's are all well and good, but do remember the wonder's of a full stop! Alternate if there is a pause at the end of each ...

The others have said pretty much all that needs to be said, but htere's one teeny tiny little spelling mistake.... It's eaves dropping, not ease. Ease means to relax. Otherwise, ...

10.27pm or so…after these events at least. A couple hours later there was a knock on the door, they hadn’t returned from their hunt as yet so I was all ...

I like it! I like it alot considering that I -loathe- ignorance. And, sadly enough, it's true in today's society. We're forced to go to school, to learn and the ...

I really, really -really- like this part Or maybe yes, but they know naught As now the tower starts to rot. It’s too late now, for though they heard Man ...

Not too bad hehe, I'm not entirely sure -what- a garter snake -is- so...Yeah. I'm aussie, we have the venomous kinds :P Buuuut, good imagery. Yeah, there's not much I ...

I like it...it's taken me three sittings to read it, curse the bell! But I like it, it's...unusual to say the least. Oh, punctuate please? There are some random places ...

Interesting... Well I suppose that's one way to look at repeated suicide attempts. Punctuation would help a touch with this poem by the way, the way you've written it makes ...

To break the phase of adoration, I have to admit that I didn't like it, actually. No offence to you of course, it's just...well, a bit pointless seeming to me ...

Edited. And as I said dear, it was originally one part, this and the second part, but after posting I thought that it was a touch long, and chopped it ...

Nice. An interesting take on Little Red Riding Hood to say the least. I like it, it's dark and all that.... And you're never told who the axeman was. I ...

I know it doesn't have much punctuation....for one I was crying as I wrote it. No, his life isn't ending -because- of the blade, but -by- the blade. He actually ...

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