ChernobyllyInclined

This was fantastic. And I don't just say that to anyone, something that you will notice if you ever come across one of my other critiques - or write something ...

That Nietszche quote...makes more sense when I read it. Never really got it too well when you read it, you know? I like how the advertisements at the bottom of ...

*dramatic music* The prologue to an epic that will sweep the nation! Unfortunately, causing great harm to its younger inhabitants. Yay. You put it on like I told you to. ...

You need to fix the format and put space between paragraphs. I would suggest throwing this out and beginning again. If you want to write a vampire story you MUST ...

Hmmm...This was okay. I found the concept interesting, it just wasn't introduced too well. Characters: Before anything else, I would like to bring up the one inconsistency that I found. ...

Further perhaps? I don't know where this is going...comments/critiques much appreciated. ______ Shifting light laced itself into the hair of a mischievous-looking boy who called himself Set. Above him

This was interesting. I quite liked the imagery and the description. I love the way you describe the paint like 'blood welling from a wound'. I like it when people ...

Hey, thanks for reviewing my story. Now I will reciprocate... This was surprisingly good. The characters were vivid and became interesting almost immediately. The descritption was also good, something

Thanks for reviewing my story. I am so thankful in fact that I will reciprocate and critique yours. Characters: I did not find the characters very compelling. Sam sounded too ...

Hmmm...Yes, I liked it. I liked it for somewhat conflicting reasons but I most definitely liked it. The only technical error that I found was the use of numbers. For ...

NEVER post this much at once. It is far from kind to people who would like to critique your work. But, aside from that, I would like to make some ...

Hmmm...I read the revised version and it was definitely better then the first draft. But their are still a few things I would like to suggest. The character that we ...

Hey! I'm not much of a lyrics person either, unfortunately, so I am useless for a critique, but this was quite original. The few other lyrics I have read have ...

This is too long to critique punctuation and grammar so I'll just address problems with the story/characters. Story: First off, there is nothing new or original about this story. The ...

Hmmm...I found this slightly dull. There was nothing new or original/exciting about the story-line. Everyone has heard the 'pretty girl who gets bitten by a vampire' story, and if you ...