ChernobyllyInclined

'Tis my first fantasy. Any and all feedback is terribly appreciated. _________ A spark spun upwards and then floated back down again, coming to rest in her outstretched hand. Two ...

Whoops, looks like you got cut off in the middle there. Fix that? Anyway, I liked it. You write engagingly and even though the story is, technically, cliche, it doesn't ...

Not sure what this. Used it for another contest but changed it around a little for this. I think the one above is in competition with this one but since ...

This was intriguing but too short for a whole chapter. Okay, here it is: The two guys are interesting and I like the way they talk. The way you described ...

Oh no! .........Oh no! ..........Oh no! This could be bad.

Why is everyone so nice? GordonRamsayLuver, you need a new username. And I like your avatar okay. It is the reason no one will look at my face anymore. Yes! ...

This was definitely better. The characters were much more vivid and I like the funny dynamic. I also liked the description that you did put in, it was good. My ...

Welcome to YWS. This was actually really interesting, and despite a few problems, I definitely liked it. Characters: Both Billy and Alexander were compelling characters, and not only because, technica

A fourth? They've all been angry and sad and lonely. I believe this one may be less so. At least I hope it is. The word is, 'odd'. Bastards ‘I ...

Yay! A new story. I liked it and, if nothing else, it will be good practice and you will learn something from it. Uh oh. It starts out with the ...

This was interesting. I think you have an intriguing idea you just had trouble implementing it in a grabbing way. Characters: I think we need to get to know Scarper ...

I suppose it must be because it's new - which means your writing has greatly improved in the last few little whiles - but this was terribly good. All of ...

Honestly, (in an un-Ethan fashion) I couldn't find a better critique under the Misty Mountains with Gollum lording over it like a little advertisement for modern warfare. This is the ...

Hmmm...this was definitely interesting. I am surprised that you have gotten only one other review - doesn't seem fair. Anyway, the characters were interesting and the description was good but ...

Third one! This is actually a small excerpt from another story. But it works fine for this. The word is 'dishes'. It's a little short so if anyone has any ...