Chelarose

So I read both chapters. There is a definite improvement. This version flowed much better, there was a lot less pointless dialogue, I knew who talking all the time, and ...

This was very good, in my opinion. It was to the point and had good voice. However, I have a couple of critiques. My first critique is, I strongly advise ...

I took it more as amusing than dark, but I have quite a cynical sense of humor. I especially love that you wrote this in second person, because it's hard ...

Ah, I love these poems so much. Now, I don't think I can give you much critique because freestyle poems are not my area of expertise at all. Your words ...

Hey sealegs! I sent you a snowman, because it was happy looking and who doesn't love a happy looking snowman? You're jealous of me? Oh, I am so jealous of ...

I didn’t want him to find me. For the umpteenth time, I looked over my shoulder to see if he was following me. Despite the fact that it was too ...

Okay, this story was absolutely adorable, it made me smile. I loved how it was the moon observing the man, it gave it a very poetic feel to the story. ...

Overall I like the story, it's very good. I have a few critiques. I think you should have given her a name. I know characters don't necessarily need names, especially ...

Hey! I'm sending this message to you in Spanish for the practice and because I had a bit of free time to write this in Spanish. It's not perfect, at ...

Okay, so I love the beginning. I am a bit concerned that she forgot about the children. It was a really good wave of emotion, but it could have had ...

I don't believe that abortions should be banned. My beliefs about abortions, though, and whether they should be banned are kind of distinct. If somebody personally asked me if they ...

Hi, Mochi! Well, Spain was nice, I loved it. Part of the reason I loved it was because most of what I remember is from when I was four and ...

The lovely new member is me, although I guess I should have let you fine folk decide on the lovely part. So my name is Richela. My nickname is Chela, ...