Charlii101

It's a little extract from a story i am working on i hope you enjoy it! The smoke poured out of the train’s chimney. It began to move out of ...

OMG it is absolutely brilliant!it's so good and i love how you have capture the imagination of a young child. it's soo good! i love totally brilliant i have no ...

I've noticed a few things i would like to change if you don't mind. I thought it was quite good and has good description but just a few tiny changes. ...

Rugby is and always will be my least favourite sports, but when your friends drag you to a school’s rugby game you can’t exactly stay hidden in the girls’ toilets. ...

“Memorise the contours, the shape of the planets, how they form that almost perfect line” The beautiful women looked down at her daughter, as her blonde waved hair fell down, ...

You changed me completely, made my world spin a different way. You tied my heart down and I can not set it free, your name stays imprinted, it can not ...

Dear diary, I have to say the most amazing thing happened today in Hogsmead. O.K. I didn't know it was going to happen it wasn't planned ... at least I ...

i know it's short, and may i just say that if there's any mistakes i am sorry, really tired and sorry if it's too short for your liking Dear diary, ...

oooo i thought this was a happy bit of lyrics until i reach the ending and it seemed to have a dark ending i loved the music that seemed to ...

I love how you leave the imagination to the reader, so they feel like there there watching this girl write in her diary, this is a good literary use, and ...

i like how it has a joyful tone and then turns very sad but i can't really see how love can come from this i can see lust hidden in ...

this has a sense of doom and gloom, it's a bit short but i doubt that should really matter as long as it good and it brings in comments and ...

right this seems a bit short but that can never hold back a good writer, i like the context but you just need to add more describing words to it ...

heyya, right i like the story flow to your 'story' (that's going to sound weird now i said it twice oh well :) ) for when they are texting i ...

to me this poem didn't really shine out, and i found t quite confusing towards the end, but i loved the strong and powerful uses in the poem, this made ...