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Re: that time of year again
hehe! i really, REALLY love this poem! It's amazing, and i really mean it. You have written it with such a great style. I'm not entirely sure about the title, ...
Jul 10, 2008 -
Re: Beautiful Dreamer (please leave a comment)
Interesting idea. It's left nicely open for the reader to imagine what his dreams are of, and i like that aspect especially. Also, the phrase beautiful dreamer is a nice ...
Jul 10, 2008 -
Re: A diagnosis
wow. Really, i loved it. You are obviously an excellent poet. I have extremely little criticism about this, but here it is... I think that the line breaks are a ...
Jul 4, 2008 -
Re: Electricity Storm
hey! i just had to comment - i thought that it was an interesting idea, and it hasn't been done before (right...?). Also, there were loads of lovely lines in ...
Jul 4, 2008 -
Re: Breathing
really gorgeous. I think what was so great about this poem was that every line was important, individual and really fluid with rhythm. There was only one point that the ...
Jul 4, 2008 -
Re: Abortion
hi. i think it's interesting to read stuff about issues of today, and it was brave, really, to write a poem about this, but i have two main arguments against ...
Jul 4, 2008 -
Re: The Four Leafed Clover Number Twenty Nine
Once I found a four leafed clover Lying on the ground, breaking the line into an ABAB rhyme scheme rather than couplets may make the rhythm easier for the reader ...
Jul 3, 2008 -
Re: rain
hello ^^ this poem had a perfectly gently atmosphere. I loved it. And i agree - i love rain too. The sound and the feel of it are soothing, and ...
Jun 30, 2008 -
Re: An Evening Lullaby
dude, really good job! Really, i love it and i'm not just saying that! I didn't even know that you wrote such amazing poetry, nat! I adored your use of ...
Jun 30, 2008 -
Re: This Tear's For You.
Hi! This poem has a lot of potential. It's not very soppy, either and you have some really beautiful imagery going on... I feel this tickle in my stomach Ticklish, ...
Jun 24, 2008 -
Re: The Blanket Covers
very interesting. I must admit that i wasn't sure whether you were being metaphorical about the blanket (i feel like an idiot for admitting it!), but i liked the poem. ...
Jun 23, 2008 -
Re: Boxes
really great! Excellent final stanza. one thing, really. It may have been done for a specific purpose, but i think you might need to change the 4th/5th lines and the ...
Jun 23, 2008 -
Re: Buttons from Bones
i think this is a very interesting poem. To be honest, i didn't really like the more coloquial (please excuse crappy spelling) terms, like 'yeah, right.' I think it's because ...
Jun 22, 2008 -
Re: Family.
‘It’s complicated.’ Yes. It is, isn’t it I laugh. There is such complication in hatred... But I wash my hands Without another word. The fog hangs in dishevelled rags, Pinned ...
Jun 22, 2008 -
Re: My Brother Has A Gun
it's certainly contentious! look at how many reviews you've snagged! :) my only real critisism is the repitition of 'my brother has a gun'. it's good at the end when ...
Jun 22, 2008
