Charliebo

Very philisophical, bisquit. It's obviously something that you thought about! My only critique is that maybe you could structure this into a poem. It might be quite interesting as it's ...

Oh, and also, it's not heaven or hell - they're just dead. I was really wondering whether perhaps everybody meets once they die... i dunno, it made lots of sense ...

sounds good. you would definately have to work hard on it to make it original, because there are a lot of 'finds herself', 'love of her life' books out on ...

hello. well, i think that you've touched a nerve! But i think it's good of you to post what you believe and challenge things. People need to challenge things or ...

hello! I thought there were a few cliches in there that are, quite frankly, dangerous, but overall, this poem seems original. Well done. But definately watch out for the cliches. ...

Big thanks to all of those who have commented on this piece - it's amazing when you realise how impartial and constructive views can make such a huge difference to ...

hello there! ok... first of all, i think that this isn't a terrible poem. I actually like it! And because of that, i reckon that it's definately worth my time ...

hi! Lol! I get it now! At first i thought that the beeping was the phone... i understand now. Well, i thought that was really good. Well written. You have ...

lol! nice one loz! This is the most demented poem that you've ever written! Lol. However, i liked it. It made me laugh (hence the lolling). I think if you ...

thanks for the suggestions. after reading your comment, i realised that there were a lot of things that i have not made obvious about the poem, it's meanings and the ...

hello. I really like this poem, so i will give it a review although i'm afraid that i might simply repeat what other people have already mentioned. Ok... The sky ...

The walls are brightly strewn with sunlit invitation; The words, clearly visible, streaking across bedspreads and lampshades. Birds twitter but remain invisible to me. And the sky is the most ...

I’m going to the dentist’s; Oh what fun’s in store! When they’re done with me, I swear I will Be eating through a straw. I almost wretch in remembrance; The ...

Hey! Very nice poem; i liked it a lot. However, there are a few minor things that are really annoying me... Sympathy is a Sin. Thick and running [s]through[/s] from ...

hello! Ok, this is a nice poem, but there were a few things that were troubling me about it... A fleeting Moment i really like the word fleeting Or a ...