CharityDawn

Unspoken words are the poison that stills my blood and decays my bones. Like detached spider legs: still twitching after their painful demise. These unspoken words stayed at the tip ...

The image I tried to attach wouldn't work... so I just added it to my DA. :) I'm a little sad that there haven't been more entries to this!

This is actually my first attempt at explaining a part of my past, and I'm not afraid to admit that it's personal. :) There will be more to come. ...I ...

Beautiful :) Had me holding my breath. Consider me a new follower. :)

So sad! These things happen realistically, so I really admire your writing for that. I didn't quite get the 'Boom ba bang' beat thing, I would love to hear this ...

This is really sad. I'm not sure if the girl is talking to her mom and her mom just isn't responding... or if she's just leaving voice-mail after voice-mail. Either ...

You had me intrigued with your story, the rain falling, perfect mascara dripping, phone ringing and ringing... I thought it was beautiful. Until you started talking about how you were ...

I love the ending! 'I would know, I'm counting' :) cute!

Gosh Zeke, Those first two reviews were harsh and even cruel. It isn't meant to be a short story, just a preview of a story you're working on. So, I ...

This is a really good beginning to a story, I enjoyed it, and you have me intrigued to hear the rest! I thought your character development was very interesting, and ...

Thanks so much, both of you, for the reviews. Yeah, I've been told that I'm an incomprehensible person. It was somewhat intentional in the poem, but thanks for pointing it ...

water is my visitor, he warms me with overbearing heat, untangles my strained muscles, and extracts haunting words from my mind. they are replaced with ecstasy. the running liquid steams, ...

This is a very good story! I love how you created the two perspectives to give the story more angles. I love the message about self-discovery revealed in such a ...

This shows potential! It's the type of story that had me wondering what was coming next up until the last sentence. It was unclear, giving me a foggy sort of ...

I always wished I had a normal life. Yet my life is what has shaped who I am today. If I had been born a normal kid, I would not ...