Char

I don't care for the prologue. It is written in a different tone than chapter one, which was good. I think you ought to delete it entirely because, trust me, ...

Did anyone ever come to this site and ask about Steve Poole? or Pazu? or anything random like that? I need to no this is very urgent.

Did anyone ever come to this site and ask about Steve Poole? S T E V E P O O L E----please respond quickly.

Chapter 1 Bren Warflame was laying flat on his back, staring blankly into the dark stone ceiling of his bedroom dormitory, on the second floor of the Academy of Heroes. ...

I am going to have to disagree with Griffen, Arvandor in saying that it is happening too quickly. The reader wants action, not more description.

chapters not done yet lol....

Oh wait, nevermind I gotcha now. I just needed to read it over. I dont think you needed to put in the whole bit about the baby getting kidnapped right ...

Ummm....I'm confused about what happened between parts one and part two. I really am clueless about how they relate. Part 2 was really good, i'd love to see some continuations ...

Thanks for the welcome guys. I posted my first story in the Fantasy Section called "the Journals" if you want to check it out

You guys rock, thanks for taking time to look at my work. I was wondering whether you would be lost with a lot of what was happening--however a lot things ...

I'm gonna just post chapters here, so that I don't have like eighty threads for one story. Chapter 1-Calesta Show kindness to all, but especially to those who hate you, ...

Hey, this is my first story posted on this site AND my first day on the site. I just started writing this today, its the beginning of the first chapter ...

I'm Char everybody...I write a variety of things, including fantasy. The latest project I am working on is realistic fiction loosely based on personal experiences. Its called "the Equivocator." And ...