Chandni

Ah I'm sorry but I haven't got much to say here, short and simplistic, yet nice descriptions and to the point indeed ;) One thing : Teary eye's, I think ...

Hehe, tell your friend it doesn't suck, just has some ups and downs like every other poem. It's just how good she covers the downs with the ups ;) First ...

It was a nice read indeed, Sworddance did most of the critiquing so I'm only going to say this lol I liked your rhyme scene and you managed to keep ...

That's alright, you either have to sign up on or and upload your photo's there and get your imagecodes to post them up here on YWS :D That's how I ...

Ah Congratulations! that's awesome :) Be proud eh mate ;) Cheerios, Chandni

6/10 It's funny although it seems to have a greater meaning lol

Well it was nicely tried, I'll back up "sabradan" here. It is indeed a typical teen angst poem, but other than that you had some usable descriptions which to my ...

I'm from Curacao and all schools here have uniforms as well even though it's not that strict since we only have to wear a polo with the school logo on ...

Good to see it back! :D Thanks, Nate

Ah how nice! The logo and everything, so different ^^

People, showing of some Dutch here lol. This song is wonderfull and I would appreciate it if you take a listnen even though you might not understand what they are ...

Howso is Sirius not dead? that would be intresting :roll:

You have some nice descriptions here indeed, as pointed out before the first line is utterly intresting and adds a boost. The last line of the first stanza bothered me ...

I believe he is eventhough there a whole website based on him not being dead, http://www.dumbledoreisnotdead.com. and also if I'm not mistaken I heard J.K. Rowling saying : "Don't expect ...

Rhyming a bit here and there, lack of punctaution, flow, structure. Disordered capitalization, cliched images. I'm sorry that's all I can get out of this piece. It's not vague, quite ...