Chandni

Ahaa, YWS in the Wiki. True knowledge right there ;)

Hehe, this is very random indeed. I can't help but sink in the tragic randomness you've created here. Try sorting out your mind, seeing the line apart from each other ...

That was highly enjoyable :D Serious yet there seems to be a slight touch of humor in there as well. I liked your rhyming it wasn't forced at all. Although ...

Very simplistic, you were straight to your point yet you could've used some description. For example: I think of her her smile so bright her hair is black but underneath ...

It was well written and I enjoyed the descriptions you gave, definitely added some emotion there. The line breaks annoyed me though, you could've added it all together or form ...

A few times a month lately, school is interfering and I haven't got much time to critique, when I critique though, I go into total rampage as well :D

Hey Twist, I've got to agree with Chevy, the first stanza was indeed a bit mystic, which could've been better. But on the other hand, it being mystic and all, ...

Thanks :) And the poem you linked to is indeed highly entertaining. I'll contact Mau-able about your critiques, and we'll eventually try to work on it ;) Cheerios, Chandni

Ah the lake of Curacao Chair under the tree Finger sunset Windmill oh Windmill

That's awesome ! :D Count me in 8)

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Regardless of the feather-like masses, the weight seemed consistently heavy They were once told a conspiracy, one which would fail our once known gravity. while my belief, rows and downs ...

Nicely done :) I really have nothing to say, which makes this critique rather meaningless. But hey I'm raising it up for you to possibly get a critique that actually ...

Hmm to me this sounds more like a statement rather than a poem. Depression is when you know you’ll do something wrong,did it anyway, and fear the consequences.It’s when you ...

Starting a war and ending it simultaneously, causing a sabotaged mind. Each recto containing; inner bombings, missiles dropping. We anger, struggle, experience- a picture perfect moment- enhanced and