Chandni

Travel in space see what’s in store, The atmosphere greets us with pleasure. Melodies soaring and whispering behind us, A lunacy fringe caught in motion. Fortress of lonesome octaves, Captivated ...

Pretty Good for a first poem.. But I'dd recommend you to capitalize the ''I'' :wink:

Really Nice.. I liked it alot The '' Heroin.'' part just adds this special thing to it Verrry nice And without her I'm stuck here, In reality with all its ...

I ran as fast as I could. To leave this lonesome world behind. As sweat dripped from my face, I stopped running and looked up to the sky. So dark ...

Nymore comments peepzz ??

I changed some parts which I had to agree with Writersdomain that were a little of rythem.. Caught up feelings, tripped emotions, spilled blood and cut out insides. Liquid tears ...

Caught up feelings,tripped emotions, spilled blood and cut out insides. Liquid tears turn cold and solid, bitterness carries the deadly taste of vomit. Seas of hatred,oceans of guilt. Miles of ...

Hey nice work first I like the short poemzies in the story but i'll have too agree with blackgroundbob. The story well... I never read the fiction section i'm not ...

hahaha nice try Psylynx..But youre RIGHT !!! hahaha :P I like your way of words.. Greetzz

i'm real sorry but I just don't seem to get the rythem here.. :( I like the topic tough...

its nice but it would flow more nicely if you would put in in stanza's the rythem and how you want to do that is up to you tough. if ...

Yeah i'll go with what ''Once upon a dream" said and I think it doesn't quite belong in Lyric Poetry but better in Narrative Poetry but then ofcourse that's just ...

Pretty cool :wink: I like the story and how it rhymes when you tell it Not much of a comment this is as I need to advance in my comment ...

Shattered in tears as the clock's about to strike midnight, I have to choose quickly for my body is filled with fright. Mom, I don't wan't to make you sad, ...

Hard to understand but still I think its wickedly tought... Nice job I like a poem that's hard to understand as it might mean something different to different kinds of ...