Chandni

Bitter is to taste you leaving, sweet is to draw you closer. Sour is to hide these feelings, and aching for time to stand still Hard is to say the ...

I adjusted it a little bit :) Thnx for the Comments Writersdomain !

I'm currently stuck with these three artists : 1. Avenged Sevenfold (Hard-Core,Metal) 2. Imogen Heap (Electronica,Pop) 3. Switchfoot (Alternative Rock)

didn't read the poem tooo long but are you really 98 years old ??? :?

Niiicee I really really like it !! The last stanza was soo cool I can relate myself soo well with this poem don't change a thing !! the part about ...

It's verry looong :shock: and i'm too lazy to read it swwy :oops:

I liked it :) Nice job ! Your choice of words is verry nice. What I didn't like were your sudden cuts in between the lines verryy akward :? Couldn't ...

nymore comments nyone ?

I liked your rhyming.. some lines did and didn't. I would never do that, but you handled it very well :wink: I didn't like the topic very well I probably ...

The still of night guides us through dawn, For day left its burden and settled away. Shadows rise and slowly crawl among us, Figuring the night will keep them awake. ...

I like it, especially the topic just wonderfull. I personally don't like the structure here, in your first stanza the first lines break is kinda anoying. It looks like you ...

nymore comments ?? :wink: :roll:

I can see your new.. This is the most stuff new members right trust me I started off the same way keep writing and you'll find yourself on this site... ...

Yeah I did mean ''Fairy Tale'' LOL

I have to agree with Snoink the last stanza was a little cliched... Verrrry Nice work for a Nine year old :wink: