Chandni

Dear Lexy, Yes, what Firestarter said. I'd suggest you to appreciate these comments especially the time there's been given to even comment, you see this site is to help you ...

Happy Thanksgiving, eventhough we're not American my family is very fond of it here :)

Well I know about that site Critique Circle, it was the next best thing I could find after YWS had its breakdown, but then I quit since TSR started and ...

Ooooh :shock: That was good !

Well I see here nice templates but then again this is so overruled and not unique as we've seen this kind of poetry tons of times. The structure is nice, ...

7/10 I find the whole patriot image pretty cool :)

Nice Pics, Ari ! and Dargquon Ql'deleodna I'm guessing you're the one all the way to right :) Jups here I am just about board the airplane, while studying WW2 ...

Well I've always said your descriptions are well, and here you tend to prove that again, which you did, quite well indeed. I don't quite envy the whole structure here ...

bagels are okay, infact mr Nate you made me hungry :P I like croissants better than bagels though

Will it ever occur to you, -figuratively speaking- the sundown, which saluts the massive damp, The radiance exposing that coral tint, shatters the navy atmosphere? Take notice By the horizon ...

Well the whole plot seems to be good, but to my concern your word-choice at some places seem a bit akward :? making it look like your telling some sort ...

Well this is quite well but a bit boring because of the last poem I read from you (Transition To Decaf) had almost the same essence. Maybe a little more ...

I added you :)

Verry hard question :? but Rock/Pop is the shizz so almost everything to do with that is cool :)

That's well done ! I can't reffer to John Cusack at the moment *does ring a bell* so I can't compare but ahh well it's nicely done