Chandni

The only negative remark I have in store is that I'd rather see failed instead of fails in the last line. I know not much about Van Gogh, except for ...

Thank you for the reviews guys, yes I've been struggling with the rhyme scene myself, but after a couple of tries I decided to give up on it and leave ...

As I float above heartaches that aren’t my own, I intend to sooth the pounding pains Running through the vessels and veins Of those who entrust me not only with ...

This poem felt like a rollercoaster to me, some of the lines impressed me and delivered strong emotions, beautifully worded. I gave up so much for us, So I could ...

This reminds of sleep paralysis which I happen to experience sometimes. Your lines flow well and neatly. I like your word usage, and the rhyme from time to time. Something ...

You managed to pull of a rhyme scene that didn't annoy me as much as others tend to do. At some parts it does sound a bit forced and you ...

Engines on and you’re blended in between two time zones. 9 hours ahead, 6 hours behind and you’re floating in the middle, gently. You close your eyes and you drift ...

Hmmm there isn't much criticism I can give without correcting quite a few things. One thing is noticable, and that is that you applied an aabbcc patterned rhyme. That is ...

Partly, looking at word use and the way you broke up your lines, it lacks one another. But that could just be the thing making this poem stand out as ...

Okay, I think the idea behind this pretty o.k. even though I find this sitting on the edge of being cliche, it's still not that overused. The description was low, ...

Thanks for your guest book entry, and yes I'll join :) Something to keep me busy :) Name: Chandni Fortunatis Gender: Female Year: 5th Year 15 years old House: Ravenclaw ...

Okay, let's start off nice and slowly here. To my concern, there was a huge lack of flow here. In between the stanza's there did happen to be a bit ...

I am actually fascinated by this and actually a bit disappointed by the fact that she didn't say this in the 7th book. I have to agree with what one ...

Amazing pictures Bob. Must've been an exquisite summer indeed. Hah I like your transformation Tessitore. Well this is my trip towards the highest top of my island Curacao. The St. ...

Started out smooth with a nice usage of words, lines were short and showed flow :) I liked your adjectives, you described well. To bottle it up, it was a ...