Chanahbanana

I agree with the other people, i think it's a little too cliche..but, i do like the last 3 lines of the last stanza. :) I think love is the ...

Hey ! Welcom to YWS :D anyways.. i think that this idea was really good, and i see where you are coming from, but i feel that your poem doesn't ...

I absolutely loved this poem! :D i loved how you have portrayed the character and anorexia itself. My favourite lines.. Mirror Mirror let me cry. Soon my tears will all ...

This is a song my friend wrote and needs help with so she asked me to post it for her (: help please? Even though you're way up there, away ...

I really love this poem so much. i think its my favourite of yours. On the other side of this wall, A person sighs, Watching this child grow up And ...

Haha yeah lol thanks! i think it goes better..(: thank you .. x

Thanks a lot..will correct the mistakes and try and improve ! :D i actually agree, vernon, i didn't know what i should put for the name and a friend suggested ...

I saw the title and it was very catching-good start :P the poem was really good and really effective. i really enjoyed it and for some reason i liked the ...

Butterflies fly Around , around, Up and down With a silent screech. Lips stretch wide With creaking edges. Teeth gleaming. Cheeks sore. Eyes glaze, Matching the smile. Reflecting the thoughts; ...

Haha yeah, i lost the file i saved it on lol Thanks..Ill change it straight away! :D

Hey , thanks for the comments. i do agree that the rainbow part can be confusing, there is a story behind it though. try to think of it from a ...

Hey haha i see you have quite a few positive and negative comments.. i really liked this, even though it was written for school, a year ago. your other poems ...

I couldn’t wait to see you Nine months I had waited; Waited to love you more, But what I had waited for left… And left with a hurry.. The day ...

Awwwwwww That Was amazing I loved that! :D I got no critiques though...really great!

I really like this and like the rythm used, also. I really like that it can also be seen as a possible break-up..how someone might feel if they have broken ...