Celdover

I must say that I simply adore your narrator! Her random thoughts, musings of the world, and conversations with herself are really entertaining to read, and she has a personality ...

Hello there. I'd like to start off with how I think this piece has potential. I like how you portrayed the urgency of the situation by having the narrator focus ...

Hey there. Let me just say that the very first thing that jumped out at me was the fact that you needed to tell us how to pronounce the name ...

Hey there. I read this and I think that there's a lot you can still improve here. Like Ranne pointed out, there are a lot of grammatical mistakes that can ...

This is a very natural read and I really enjoyed how you set up things in the first paragraph. I also really liked the narrator's snappy comments that came up ...

First off, I would like to say that the narration feels very blah to me, and the description feels like it's grinding the story to a halt. We first see ...