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The first thing that jumps out at me is how dull this piece is. Now I'm confident that you were attempting to go for a dull and bleak environment considering ...

Hello there! I'm Dover and I shall be reviewing you today. I like how you did your best to capture the feel of the outdoors, but I feel like that ...

This was so totally an English assignment. Act I: Tibalt and Juliet Tibalt: Yo, Juliet. Juliet: ‘Sup, cuz? Tibalt: Wel I wuz ch@n wit Abraham n do u wnt to ...

Good thing I have strep throat. Lumi, your strep throat should be long gone by now. Where's your recording? ;P

Hi there! I'm Dover and I shall be reviewing you today. The first thing that struck me about this piece was its vagueness. Who are these gladiators? The man? The ...

Hey there! I am going to agree with everything leebass said before. The lines about the cellphones and the birds was my favorite part, and I also agree that the ...

Hello there! I really enjoyed this lighthearted piece. It's short and sweet and reminded me of a few instances where some of my teachers got angry at their G.P.S.s for ...

Hello there. I shall be reviewing you today. (: I'd like to start off with that there's nothing enormous that jumped out at me technically speaking. The choice of vocabulary ...

Hello there. To be honest, this really didn't draw me in to your story. It rambles quite a lot on a philosophical question and giving exposition all the while. We're ...

Also reviewing a bit of chapter two in this one. I take it you'll be consistent with only changing viewpoints at each chapter? If so, then your viewpoint shifting is ...

Ask, and you shall receive. To be perfectly honest, I found this to be very dull and predictable. I see your standard teenager about to get into some trouble with ...

Hello there. Nice to meet you. I like the historical and artistic aspects of this piece and how you show how the characters feel about them. Passionate and protective, intrigued, ...

Hi there. I'd like to start with agreeing with Lavvi on your dialogue and verb tenses, the tenses first because they're more of a problem. It's not so much you're ...

Hello there! I certainly like the interesting setup you have here and how you're trying to establish a different culture. I can see you're trying to have a naming convention ...

Hello. This was a nice and calm read. I think you did a good job displaying Sarah and Chelsea's emotions in the moment and how they felt about the summer ...