CassandraInvisible

This has the potential to be a good story, you could elaborate on it further, make it longer and give it some more depth. I found it kind of hurried ...

Hmm. I feel like the poem is a bit out of sync, to give it more flow you should have stanzas of equal or alternating length, so the reader can ...

Sugar sweet and softly too; But here’s the thing – I don’t love you. Sickly, gaudy, paradise, You’re so toxic, ‘cause you’re so nice. I take it that's the chorus? ...

This is a really nice poem. I particularly like the comparison you have going here, of human beauty to the beauty of flowers (at least that's how I interpreted it.) ...

For somebody rather young, I thought this was quite a good poem. Through my mind I think about our memories, while you re-arrange my face. That's my favourite line, although ...

nice

Behind the Sea - Panic at the Disco

Haha. I rather like this. It's witty and you've managed to make something rather dull, rather interesting. The humour is subtle, I had to read it twice to fully get ...

I like the recurring 'But' at the start of every second line. It gives the poem a structure and rhythm. I've read stuff similar to this before, but the great ...

That's very true. Reminds me of similar quotes I've read, but I like it.

Fortunately, she had a baton with which to discipline people.

Sixteen

Bottle It Up - Sara Bareilles

Oh cool. Nice to meet you. Well once I leave high school, I want to get the hell out of this place! =D I've got family in Canada, I'm planning ...

I recognize the title... I'm pretty sure I've read it, and it was amazing. Edit: Oh I love your signature. Sylvia Plath = brilliant.