CassandraInvisible

Actually, the MC came off as male to me, I don't know why. Yay! That's the effect I was going for. I get what you mean about the bluntness, I ...

Reoccuring should be recurring This is a nice little poem, but I wasn't too sure where it's going either. I think you should expand it, write a couple more stanzas ...

You've had too much energy drink. Why won't my ex talk to me? I thought we were friends! I even wished him a happy 18th birthday >

I would add more in the story about the victim. Right now, there isn't a whole lot about the girl that took her life. You say they made fun of ...

I think I get what you're saying, the "show, don't tell" thing. I kind of thought that I'd do that with this poem, maybe because, being a personal issue, I ...

I hear your voices through the wall at night Nothing is secret in this house anymore I hear the yelling and the sobbing Walls are paper thin and can't protect ...

I like this [even though I couldn't fully grasp what it was about.] The rhyme scheme, to me, seems to work. I like the effect of the repetition too.

Don't believe the weathers perfect the day you die I noticed this line, and recognized it from an Armor For Sleep song. I could be wrong, but I think you ...

A girl obsessed with Draco Malfoy. Obsession [old tda name]

Thank you for your reviews, advice and for pointing out spelling errors ^^ However as for the rambling on bit I have a feeling you want to end this piece ...

7/10 Cute

So I need some help with this. I'm rambling on, and I don't know how to finish it off. And the title is crappy. Any suggestions? One of the worst ...

Thank you for your thoughts, sometimes I make things a bit cliche >< I'm hoping to develop it more so that everything makes sense in the end =D

8/10 Very good statement.

4/10 Um I don't really get it? But you do so that's all that matters heh.