Cassandra

So I get to be the first to crit C1? *dances* :D owners of the shed had been friendly enough people; This sounds awkward: I would consider cutting the word ...

In his right hand, he held the reins of two llamas, beasts the Moche respected and loved for their life-giving capacities. You don't need the first comma in this sentence, ...

Mostly, if I start to read something, I'm going to finish it and crit it. Because for me, I don't waste my time reading something that I don't want to ...

7/10 I liked your old one better, Clau. It was all spiffy and sharp and this one's older and kinda crumbly...and you're not a crumbly person! :D

It sounds silly, but one thing I have trouble with when critting bothers me before I even begin the review; what to read? I have, I believe, three critiques left ...

Here's something that I've been wondering about for a while. Many people know the feeling: when you get bored with your current project, you start daydreaming about another one you ...

Honestly? Probably just one to many kicks when I'm down, so to speak. Once I hit my breaking point...it's bad. I'm bad. -Charon Do you have a significant other? If ...

I've never written a script before. Ever. O.O My goodness, that'd be difficult. Most of the words in my 50k were description and other useless stuff!

Three more! I'll squeeze 'em in along with math review and a DBQ...:D

XD I'm almost at 1k! Almost....!

I agree with Jennafina about this piece lacking action--this seems like a lot of teenage angst to me. Tears filling my eyes but do you even know. This is a ...

I know what you mean about POV and tense--I can never really decide. So far I'm liking it the way you have it, but you may decide to change it ...

Thanks, Kay and Skye! I think I'm going to go through and add more about my experience on the second draft. I'm just not sure which of the factual stuff ...

Hey, and welcome to YWS! PM me if you have any questions. :D

A nice pink, I think. Not too bright, but bright enough to stand out. --Florence Helene Um...gray? --Charon Describe your surroundings at this moment.