Cassandra

Nice work, all! And my goodness! That's a lot of points! :shock:

I hope to try this at some point, though it'll probably end up being this weekend or later, after midterms. *grumble grumble*

Thank you for this! I knew that saying a person was laying on the ground was wrong, but never knew why! Now I do. :D

Yeah, I agree with Cass on pretty much all of the points. I expected a bigger ending, but I think the thing with his eyes sparkling showed that he had ...

Thanks for the links, Sureal! If I ever manage to edit any of my short stories to my liking, I might send some off, and this will be so helpful. ...

I'm not really feeling anything; I'm asleep. --Charlie My body's tired, but I really don't want to go to sleep. Really don't. And my hands are shaking again. --Scarlett What ...

Lemme tell you what happens as soon as I click this link, Snoinkus: --I check how long the story is (One black mark next to my name as a critiquer) ...

Hi there, and welcome to YWS! PM me if you have any questions, and enjoy the site! :D --Cass

Real artists do make paintings that consist only of splattering paint on a canvas, guys, and it IS art...just because you don't particularly care for a painting does not mean ...

The second batch of lines definitely adds to the poem, the imagery...oh yes. Keep those lines, Clau. I remain incredibly impressed, and can find nothing to pick at in this ...

I agree with DD about the length--it's perfectly fine for this poem. And Clau! Weren't you just saying a few months ago that you can't write or crit poetry? Because ...

So. I don't know anything about Tov, besides that in the Character Answer Game over on Writing Activities his answers are always amusing. I also don't know much about the ...

I wish it was the strawberries and cream I usually associate these colours with, but its doctors coats and blood. I wish it were ...but it's doctors' coats and blood. ...

Stuff is so screwed up with my parents right now, and it's beyond the usual teenage angst stuff...I don't even want to talk about it. --Scarlett My mom's really supportive ...

I know what you mean as far as posting goes--I'm terrified to post anything from any sort of novel I'm working on, because A) What if I don't finish it/neglect ...