Carmina

Chasing the Sunset Karen tried not to look at the food. When she did, the poppy seeds looked like ants. They crawled over the bagel and towards her fingers. She ...

Points for depressing, if that was your goal. I like the line "because I've never stood in the light". I think to be grammatical, you should say "I've never gotten" ...

I really enjoyed your story, but then, I'm kinda morbid and like serial killers. Anyway, some suggestions for tightening it up: [his significant other hanged herself in his closet] "Significant ...

Upbeat is good. There is not enough of it these days.

(I've never attempted narrative poetry, so if I dropped the ball, let me know where this belongs...and don't say the trash or I'll cry) In the darkness, I reached out ...

Gosh that's upbeat.

It is exactly what the title implies. On second thought, no. It don't think it is random. Random implies no reason. That is doesn't come from anywhere. This comes from ...

I don't like most poems I read. I liked this one. Since this is supposed to be critique though, I'll come up with something. I think the name Dusk sounds ...

I haven't been a member for very long, so I don't even really know how member of the month is chosen, but thank you everyone. :D

(No preamble. Here's my sonnet) Are you sorry for everything you said, And all the things you forgot to say too, When everything got so complicated, And you said I ...

Which kiss are you writing about? Are you reflecting on a a second kiss with one person and comparing it to the first kiss with this person? Or are you ...

If its not about slitting your wrists, then don't start the poem with slitting your wrists. I think the poem is stronger without the first two stanzas. I actually think ...

This is in response to Incandescence. What does this dissertation have to do with the topic of whether or not homosexuality is against Christianity? Why are we comparing Christianity to ...

This is response to Duskglimmer. I know I didn't say what it was that happened. I was wondering when someone would say something about that. I like ambiguity. I know ...

As far as getting the emotion of the situation on paper, good job. Your pain and concern for your family come across very well. It comes across, though, as something ...