CardDragon

The chat room is going to be packed :shock: .

so they are actually food? A strange and hungry- tickling story.

It is strange about your fantasy of talking food. I must laugh. Though it is pretty strange that bread can last some months without having mold on it. With that ...

Basically I will say 3 things. One I cannot comment on the poem style because I do not know much about poem structure, though I will say this the poem ...

Everything was excellent, I must say. There was a perfect flashback , in the middle of the story. Though the reader cannot possibly know who Nari and Yeon Sook are. ...

Okay, it is CardDragon here for suggestions. Take no offense to what I am about to say. Sometimes it is best to leave cliffhangers towards the end of the book. ...

I am just going to say this now, do not take these comments to heart. Alright there where errors in the story, like when you used came instead of come. ...

Do not change it with foreshadowing, the story took me by storm. It is my favorite story!

somebody ghouled Puzzle. :o

that dude is a lucky Caterpillar,eating a forsaken apple. Haaa. HAA!

HOLLY COW! This started off good and normal, then it just turned plain out weird. Just like a Dresden Cloak comic( you should search it up). I was shocked at ...

Thanks everyone for there comments. It keeps me going. This is much better than approval from family. ;)

Name: Jimmy Tale Age: 25 Gender: Male Race: human Element: Fire Appearance: History: Grew up in a wealthy family. He lived there until he discovered his abilities. His family hates ...

I am going to say that this was weird. It may be confusing but if you read over it you can understand it. It was all the themes that go ...

Ducky you actually have the lips of a duck,(that was a joke). Well anyways,AWKWARD.