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Re: The White Room (Warning: Graphic Imagery)
Wow, that was intense. Its got so many elements of horror. Elements of Absence The Unknown The Unexpected The Unstoppable The Unseen Elements of Presence Helplessness Pressure Intensity Release All ...
Oct 9, 2009 -
Re: :: Rain ::
Really strong, i like how you relate rain to love, rain comes and goes, as does love. But at the same time love is like fire. Its different, i like ...
Oct 9, 2009 -
Re: The Heart
Great poem. The Line: And sometimes a land in drought Obtains the gentle water's spray Its the perfect way to show the good and bad sides of love. The way ...
Oct 9, 2009 -
Re: The Last Halloween at Desolate Creek Chapter 1 Revision 1
Thanks for the advice guys, this was a "sloppy copy", i was hoping to get some good criticism and I did! I did my best to revise everything, I probably ...
Oct 9, 2009 -
Re: The Last Halloween at Desolate Creek Chapter 1 Revision 1
The Last Halloween at Desolate Creek Chapter 1 Revision 1 The gruesome stench lingered for days, turning even the strongest of stomachs. Very few words can even begin to describe ...
Oct 8, 2009 -
Re: The Virus - 1
Really cool idea, and sort of reminds me of I Am Legend but from a female perspective. I like it :D Cant wait for number 2.
Oct 8, 2009 -
Re: Exodus Preview
happy-go-lucky hit the nail on the head. Really good detail, gave me a good picture of the time and characters. Hopefully part 2 will be just as good.
Oct 6, 2009 -
Re: The Soccer Locker
Awesome idea, very original. I think you should use more imagery and descriptions. Take more time explaining the main character, the bus, the school, the ride in the locker, what ...
Oct 6, 2009
