CannonBallBaker

Hi CannonBall! So, I like this. The syntax, in my opinion adds to the poem. I saw where you said that what you've posted is from Italian, so I won't ...

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I love the first stanza because besides its powerful phrasing I was left with the dual interpretation of being lightninged and of sinning from every "side" at the same time. ...

God lightning me, because I have sinned, from every perspective, from every side. I renounce without reserve the primordial gift, maybe this is, my crime more serious, what triggers the ...

i will repeat it again. I am Italian, it is obvious that it is not grammatically correct in English. these translations are made by a machine translation, taken from Italian. ...

Smirks the fireball launched from evil, walking sloppy, approached her. People flee from the horrible cruelty that pierces the air, a cry is widespread, but the man does not perceive ...

Smirks the fireball launched from evil, walking sloppy, approached her. People flee from the horrible cruelty that pierces the air, a cry is widespread, but the man does not perceive ...

Hey, Cannon! I'm Pink/Shear/etc. Welcome to YWS! I see that you've been here for a while now, I hope you're enjoying the site so far. So, you really live in ...

Yeah, it's pretty beautiful. :) I'm actually from California, but have lived here for a couple of years. c: :) Nice.. I do not know, I do not have a ...

Welcome to the site! I don't think you'll have any problems with the focus on here- it's really writing-oriented, and is a great way of getting support and feedback. That's ...

Saw you were from Italy. That is so cool! I'd love to go there someday. Anyway, Welcome, friend, to the weird world of YWS! I hope you can take part ...

Hello, buddy! :D I understood the poem, and I can't locate the grammar errors! o___o But I guess it's because Italian and Spanish are a bit alike, so I'll leave ...

I become matters of eternal,The memory is lost, spreadingat a speed of a cloud destructive, This part doesnt make any sense to me. I dont understand the part "cloud destructive"? ...

The air passes through the clothes I wear, eyes, tightened as loopholes, protect themselves from the sky moved, Flight. Been torn from the ground. I become matters of eternal, The ...

Good morning to all, is a pleasure to be part of this great world devoted to writing. I have become a part of this family recently, but I can see ...