Cameeno

I haven't been on this site for awhile, but I'm back again and I updated this poem, since I had written a different version after I posted it. so please ...

This poem was intriguing, and I liked how it felt shadowy. But it didn't leave me satisfied. It was disjointed, like you were just putting down random thoughts without any ...

I enjoyed this story, but I have to agree with what Sam said, it was very emotional, but some parts didn't really connect with me. To make your story more ...

Whenever I sit down to write, I write about a page or two of a story and I stop. Either I decide what I've written is no good, or I ...

Static, your voice smudges, sound waves connecting us, quavering like a rubber band stretched between two whitened fingers, the pressure will snap. Now I realize why I loved you. We ...

I liked the short scentences in this poem, as it showed the overall theme of time passing by quickly. But the poem didn't grab my attention. "Eternal, Forever, Time" are ...

Yeah I like homeschooling a lot. It isn't for everyone, and there are some disadvantages, but it really works well for me. I probably wouldn't like public school because of ...

HI! Well I just make my account, and my username was going to be Carmeeno, which is my friend's nickname for me. But I completly spaced and left out the ...

The Deathbed of a Tree I can sense the lightning winding it's clockwork tighter, until it will strike The core of my heartwood. Fire will consume my limbs scattering ashes ...

Thanks for the comments. I edited it and put some punctuation in it like you suggested.

Ok so I'm new to this site, I'm also new to writing poetry as I have only been writing it for a few weeks. Please crit! Becoming the rain What ...