Calmal

The Skating Scene: I thought you described the skating very well and clear to understand especially as you have never skated your self (though to be fair, neither have I ...

You have made a couple of spelling mistakes towards the end of this piece: Half and hour later should be Half an hour later and relatives or friends are mission ...

There are a few grammatical errors within this piece. Try to avoid repetition and replace it with different words i.e instead of using the characters name use "he/she" or "our ...

As a Junior Writer, I also agree with Coco and Stealth Slicer that there is something missing. I agree with Dubian that some of this block does not make sense. ...

There are a few grammatical errors that I wish to draw to your attention. When you are talking about a large number of people it is "too many" rather than ...

This story is too vague despite your early warning. We need a hint of something about to happen. Science Fiction is set into ten main categories: Hard Science Fiction This ...

You have made a good start to what good be a succesful story. There are many films and stories about super virus' affecting the world and wiping out a large ...

There are very few errors that I can notice in this piece which shows that you take great pride in your work. The plot shows great promise and I would ...

This story has great potential which you have shown through your attention to detail. You have carfully though about the 5 W's (Who, Where, When, Why and What) essential to ...