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Re: Obsidian: A Tale of Africa
This is a great beginning. It was interesting and well written. Your style really gave me a feel for the two brothers, and it makes me want to keep reading. ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Wrong
Thanks so much for the reviews! :) I wrote this for a writing class a few years ago, and I know it could be improved. Thanks for giving me suggestions ...
Jul 3, 2011 -
Re: Don't be distracted by the sneezing (Working Title)
This was a great story idea. I love how you told it from the dragon's point of view, because it gives a feel for Sylvester's personality. There are a few ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Bunnies Are Evil
So, everybody else already commented on your mistakes, but even with the errors it was a great story. Someone mentioned Monty Python and the Holy Grail, and I definitely agree! ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Wrong
Deleted. Sorry.
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Calendar Reset
This was a really interesting story, I liked it. There are a few places where you're missing some punctuation. Also, in the first paragraph you used the word "built" three ...
Jul 1, 2011 -
Re: Out of the Dark
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Jun 14, 2011