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Cailey

  • Narrative Poetry Re: Sinking

    The little girl died? Horrible! But I loved the poem and it made me laugh. It teaches a wonderful lesson. Your rhyme is good, even with the few words that ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Cycles Of Agony

    I liked the poem, it was good, and I could feel the agony you were describing. My feeling are numb, This should be my feelings are numb or my feeling ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: My master

    Deleted...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Squirrel and the Fly- A Fable

    Good job, it was short and cute. I noticed a few things, but the story was good the way it is, so feel free to ignore me. what the matter ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: He said

    So, I really was meaning to write a helpful review, but like everyone else said, this poem was just really good. "You'll never be alone." He said. I think this ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • Other Poetry Re: Morning Rain

    I'm not sure where to post this poem, so I just decided to put it here. :) Hopefully that's ok. I know this isn't very good, so any and all ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Fairytales

    This was good, I liked the way you wrote in present tense, it really did make the story sound more graceful. You had a new paragraph for each sentence, which ...

    Jul 12, 2011
  • Lyric Poetry Re: A Day On Daddy's Motorcycle

    Good job, that was really sweet. I loved it. The line "Is like Christmas every once in a while" didn't fit the rhytm quite right, but overall, this was great. ...

    Jul 6, 2011
  • Narrative Poetry Re: --

    This was good, I really liked your revised version. However, the line, "for the fire burns when the tide turns." Didn't fit quite right. It just didn't match the rhythm. ...

    Jul 6, 2011
  • Lounge, The Re: How did you find the Young Writers Society?

    Google :D

    Jul 6, 2011
  • Official Polls Re: Are you writing a novel?

    Yep, I'm writing a novel and I've written a novel and I plan on writing more novels. Although at the moment I haven't been working on my book because I'm ...

    Jul 6, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Ephemeral And Hard Working - That's Me!

    Good job! I liked this, it made me laugh. I really enjoy reading from different points of view, and you don't often get to read about how an ant feels. ...

    Jul 5, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: Clown in the dark

    This was good, I liked your open ending. You had good descriptions, but towards the end you didn't describe enough. And, you need to edit! There are several minor mistakes, ...

    Jul 5, 2011
  • General Fiction Short Stories Re: The Clock

    This story is great. It definitely is creepy. I agree that it is a little bit confusing, specifically this part didn't make a whole lot of sense. Even after reading ...

    Jul 5, 2011
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Monster

    It reaches into my soul And tears me apart, One piece at a time. It devours me. Somehow, It slipped into my dreams; It filled my thoughts and emotions. It ...

    Jul 5, 2011


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