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Re: Sinking
The little girl died? Horrible! But I loved the poem and it made me laugh. It teaches a wonderful lesson. Your rhyme is good, even with the few words that ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Cycles Of Agony
I liked the poem, it was good, and I could feel the agony you were describing. My feeling are numb, This should be my feelings are numb or my feeling ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: My master
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Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: The Squirrel and the Fly- A Fable
Good job, it was short and cute. I noticed a few things, but the story was good the way it is, so feel free to ignore me. what the matter ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: He said
So, I really was meaning to write a helpful review, but like everyone else said, this poem was just really good. "You'll never be alone." He said. I think this ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Morning Rain
I'm not sure where to post this poem, so I just decided to put it here. :) Hopefully that's ok. I know this isn't very good, so any and all ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: Fairytales
This was good, I liked the way you wrote in present tense, it really did make the story sound more graceful. You had a new paragraph for each sentence, which ...
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: A Day On Daddy's Motorcycle
Good job, that was really sweet. I loved it. The line "Is like Christmas every once in a while" didn't fit the rhytm quite right, but overall, this was great. ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: --
This was good, I really liked your revised version. However, the line, "for the fire burns when the tide turns." Didn't fit quite right. It just didn't match the rhythm. ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: How did you find the Young Writers Society?
Google :D
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: Are you writing a novel?
Yep, I'm writing a novel and I've written a novel and I plan on writing more novels. Although at the moment I haven't been working on my book because I'm ...
Jul 6, 2011 -
Re: Ephemeral And Hard Working - That's Me!
Good job! I liked this, it made me laugh. I really enjoy reading from different points of view, and you don't often get to read about how an ant feels. ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Clown in the dark
This was good, I liked your open ending. You had good descriptions, but towards the end you didn't describe enough. And, you need to edit! There are several minor mistakes, ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: The Clock
This story is great. It definitely is creepy. I agree that it is a little bit confusing, specifically this part didn't make a whole lot of sense. Even after reading ...
Jul 5, 2011 -
Re: Monster
It reaches into my soul And tears me apart, One piece at a time. It devours me. Somehow, It slipped into my dreams; It filled my thoughts and emotions. It ...
Jul 5, 2011
