Cailey

Luna I gasped in shock as Amanda crawled over the ground searching for something, but what? "Amanda?" I tried talking to her, but she pushed me out of the way ...

That was beautiful, I love it. I was so caught up in the poem that I forgot to check for grammar and spelling mistakes. So I only have one correction ...

Great job! I just read psalms 46 after reading your poem. Psalms 46:1 is one of my favorite verses. I can only imagine what the music for this song is, ...

I like this, though the first is best in my opinion. :) I really love how you described them, nameless and faceless, and repeatedly say they don't matter, yet by ...

What's backwards is forwards Comes tumbling down This is the only line that sounded weird... I loved the rest and have no complaints! (Although punctuation would be nice...) You did ...

I read the other comments and am very in between. I like the poem, it's very simple. Yet, it didn't seem very poetic... I felt like I was just reading ...

And if you come and fly with me, You'll see as I see. You'll see as I see felt off to me. It didn't fit with the stanza. And each ...

(Wait... Rainy day, aren't you supposed to be Tyler?)

Luna I was growing more and more confused. As Amanda began to revive she pushed me away, as if hating the idea of having anyone pay attention to her. Karma, ...

First off, this was a wonderful poem, so full of emotion. I don't even want to review it because of how personal and how beautiful it is. Yet, you put ...

It feels so strong, I don't like the fact that there are so many commas here. Maybe add some other type of punctuation to add variety? Pulsing inside, Gently at ...

Ok, so first off, this seemed way too abrupt to be a poem. You tell the reader everything without trying to disguise it with imagery or anything. It should have ...

(Drustan got tackled by Karma)

Luna Rose Perez The little girl, Lulu, as I suddenly knew, was adorable. Yet, soon her sister, Abigail, came and took her away. I sat next to the girl who ...

Wow, while reading this whole poem I felt like it was a super deep meaningful poem and I felt like I was missing most of it... Still, what I was ...